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I wish I liked this more but it was all one note

Under Pressure CoverUnder Pressure by Lauren Ashley

My rating: 3 of 5 stars

NOTE: 8/10/19 – I’ve just received an updated ARC with an edited ending, so I shall see what has changed and report back accordingly.

Okay, I’ve read the edited version and my original review and rating still stands.

Both things I was WTFing about still come out of nowhere and, while there’s a bit more follow up for both, it still feels like a heavy handed way of setting up book two and wrapping up the issue with Scott’s parents and niece.

***

Original Review This was okay and I was liking the sweet nature of the story until it went a bit bizarre at the end.

I’m going to come back when I’ve had time to think about it more.

***

Righty I’m back.

So, the biggest issue I had with this one was that it was all one tone, there were no highs and lows to bring tension to the narrative up until the very end – like I’m talking at 96% ish! when all of a sudden there’s a huge plot point for what I suspect is going to be book two in the series.

I won’t say it came from nowhere, there’d been a tiny hint that the person involved might be singing from the same hymnsheet, if you see what I mean, but nothing even close to the revelation that comes out.

Then, in the EPILOGUE there’s a throwaway line about Scott’s parents and his niece which was an absolute cop-out imho and basically made me just shake my head.

Unfortunately, for me, there wasn’t anything which made this one stand out in a sea of similar sports romance/fake boyfriend/I’m never going to fall in love, oh look whoops I did books on the market.

Not to say it’s badly written, it’s a fairly tightly paced book and the characters are decently drawn and I loved Drew’s madcap extended family. I’d have just liked a bit more light and shade as we used to say in the dance world, to give depth.

Everything was just a bit too simple, a bit too easy, a bit too telling and not a lot of showing and most of the details were sex scenes not emotional connections between the two. Also, I felt they read much older than they were supposed to be (23-year-olds).

#ARC kindly received from the author in return for an honest and unbiased review

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Bitty, no real story narrative and a few editing mistakes

The WarehouseThe Warehouse by Jason Collins

My rating: 2 of 5 stars

This wasn’t good, it read for a long time like some 15 year-old girl’s romantic idea of what an instant attraction should be like.

There were duplicated paragraphs almost word for word in the opening two chapters and the book contradicted itself early on too. Sloppy editing mistakes didn’t help with the flow of the story and I’m afraid the whole thing was just a bit outlandish.

I’m not sure there are public go go dance clubs where the patrons are allowed to suck off the dancers, or where the dancers get it on with each other on stage, I though that thing was restricted to private members only places licensed for sex work. So it made the narrative unbelievable for a lot of the plot.

Throw in a random stalker plot, plus the ‘straight’ guy’s girlfriend being an artificial roadblock because she was the boss’s daughter, and this book was a whole heap of mess.

Sorry, I don’t like to be critical just for the sake of it, but with a bit of thought and some better polishing, this would have been a much more coherent read.

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